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Title: Journey To The Past
Post by: FanFiction Bot on November 06 2006, 05:03 pm

This post is for discussion of the fan-fiction:

Journey To The Past (http://www.capturedwings.net/fanfiction/display.php?sid=69)

Story Description:

A mission in time, to save the past, present, and future.

Title: Re: Journey To The Past
Post by: Arcademan on November 07 2006, 01:14 pm

Nice start, however you may want to space out your sentences since the entire story looked like it was one long paragraph. Once you space it and paragraph it, it'll look cleaner and I promise, you as well as others will find the same words more enjoyable to read.

Look forward to more :)

Title: Re: Journey To The Past
Post by: AirKitty on November 08 2006, 10:47 am

Thankyou Arcademan, I'll keep that in mind ^-^

Title: Re: Journey To The Past
Post by: AirKitty on November 08 2006, 05:25 pm

:sweatdrop: I'm working on the second chapter, I'm gonna try proof writing it on Microsoff word, to make
it look better (and not so many spelling mistakes)!  :homework:

Title: Re: Journey To The Past
Post by: AirKitty on December 04 2006, 01:37 pm

:D Woot! Chapter two is up! And it's realllll long ( well to me anyways, it took up four pages on Microsoft!  :heh: )

Title: Re: Journey To The Past
Post by: Arcademan on December 09 2006, 09:55 am

Just a few spelling errors but this chapter showed lots of improvement. The end of the chapter added a lot of suspense that has me counting the days until you post the next chapter. Excellent story, AirKitty...keep up the great work :)

Title: Re: Journey To The Past
Post by: AirKitty on December 20 2006, 11:36 am

Thanks, I gotta start working on it!  :heh: